Thursday, September 10, 2015

Bully Summary Response Redo

Summary Response Outline

Connor Peterson, Kiennes Adams

  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch is a documentary that explores peer to peer bullying across the country and the consequences and effects of it.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main idea
The consequences and effects that bullying causes is shown throughout the movie by visiting different people who have been bullied. This documentary helps people understand how bullying can affect a person’s personality and how it can cause them to do something drastic.
  • Explanation of ideas
In Lee Hirsch's’ documentary about bullying, young kids tell their story about how they are bullied and how it changes them everyday. Alex Hopkins, age 12, is shown alone on the playground and continues to say that he thinks he belongs somewhere else. He also explained, “I’m starting to think that I don’t feel anything anymore”. A 16 year old named Kelby says she has tried to commit suicide three times because people bully her for being gay. She has now decided to move schools and homes to avoid this. 14 year old basketball player and honor student Jameya became tired of being bullied and brought a gun onto the school bus to defend herself. Others, including Tyler Lee Long and Ty Field-Smalley were not as hopeful and took their lives because of bullying.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
As shown in Bully by Lee Hirsch, bullying is a worldwide event that has many consequences and effects kids around the country that experience it everyday because they are different in some way.

  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
Bully, by Lee Hirsch distinctly portrays bullying across America because it takes the audience through the different experiences of children who have been bullied and how it has affected them and their families.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up - Hirsch accurately shows the power bullying has over a person. This is shown through the few out of many kids who are being bullied today.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” Jeff Johnson, a pastor at the local church, explains at the community meeting, “If bartenders are responsible for a drunk that goes out and kills somebody, how come the bullies aren’t responsible for the death of this precious child?” (Hirsh).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim - Jeff Johnson explains that he believes the bullies are responsible for any deaths of the kids they bully or have bullied. Hirsch shows in the documentary that many people believe this and that the bullied do not have any way to escape being bullied.
  • Counterclaim 1: However.....
    • Set-up - However, bullying does not have complete control over a person and their life. It is a person’s choice to believe a bully and let that person control their actions. They can choose whether or not they want to live a happy life.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” Hirsch shows Alex saying, “I don't believe in luck, but I believe in hope.” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim - Although Alex is intensely bullied every day, he chooses to be happy and doesn’t let what the bullies do or say get in the way. Some kids may choose to approach the situation differently  and take their lives, but it is nobodies choice but theirs.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
    • A common view is that a kid can choose to be happy whether or not they get bullied. Many think that it is up to the bullied to decide on how to deal with what they are going through. We cannot deny that different victims of bullying deal with being bullied differently. It is also agreeably that the answer to being a part of this is not taking your life. But it's more complicated than that in the matter that it is contagious. Bullying is not found in just one school, but many across the world. Race, gender, looks, and actions fuel bullying. One of Kelby’s friends makes a point that, “Anytime someone comes around that’s the least bit different, they make sure to put them down” (Hirsch).
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • The film Bully, by Lee Hirsch brings to life all the troubles that kids face across the country in and out of school because they are considered different. The film guides the viewers through multiple stories of bullied kids and how it changed not only their lives but their families.

1 comment:

  1. You need to fix your topic sentence, especially this part, "Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch is a documentary"- look at the examples we have done to see what is incorrect.

    Make sure your summary is all your own wording and not using quotations. Also, make sure it is concise. This is too lengthy.

    Good job with your claim.Make sure to spell Hirsch accurately. Also, make sure in your counterclaim that you adequately set up your source of your quote. Put it in context before you give us the quote. Who? what?

    Good start to your rebuttal- amke sure to explain the quotation you are using and eliminate personal words. Keep pushing your thinking.

    Punctuate title correctly.

    Conclusion should be one sentence.