Tuesday, September 1, 2015

Connor Peterson and Kiennes Adams, Summary Response on Bully

Summary Response Outline
Bully

Connor Peterson, Kiennes Adams

Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch is a documentary that sheds light on peer to peer bullying across the country and the consequences and effects of it.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main idea
The consequences and effects that bullying causes is shown throughout the movie by visiting different people who have been bullied. This documentary helps people understand how bullying can affect a person’s personality and how it can cause them to do something drastic.
  • Explanation of ideas
In Lee Hirsch's’ documentary about bullying, young kids tell their story about how they are bullied and how it changes them everyday. Alex Hopkins, age 12, is shown alone on the playground and continues to say that he thinks he belongs somewhere else. He also explained, “I’m starting to think that I don’t feel anything anymore”. A 16 year old named Kelby says she has tried to commit suicide three times because people bully her for being gay. She has now decided to move schools and homes to avoid this. 14 year old basketball player and honor student Jameya got tired of being bullied and brought a gun onto the school bus to defend herself. Others, including Tyler Lee Long and Ty Field-Smalley were not as hopeful and took their lives because of bullying.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Bullying is a very dangerous and hurtful thing that causes very severe consequences and effects to kids around the country that experience it everyday because they are different in some way, this is shown in the movie Bully which is directed by Lee Hirsch.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
Bully, by Lee Hirsch clearly and accurately portrays bullying across America because it takes the audience through the different experiences of children who have been bullied and how it has affected them and their families.

  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up - Hirsch accurately shows the power bullying has over a person. This is shown through the few out of many kids who are being bullied today.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (“If bartenders are responsible for a drunk that goes out and kills somebody, how come the bullies aren’t responsible for the death of this precious child?” Jeff Johnson)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim - Jeff Johnson explains that he believes the bullies are responsible for any deaths of the kids they bully or have bullied. Hirsch shows in the documentary that many people believe this and that the bullied do not have any way to escape being bullied.
  • Counterclaim 1: However.....
    • Set-up - However, bullying does not have complete control over a person and their life. It is a person’s choice to believe a bully and let them control their actions. They can choose whether or not they want to live a happy life.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (“I don't believe in luck, but I believe in hope.” Alex)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim - Although Alex is intensely bullied every day, he chooses to be happy and doesn’t let what the bullies do or say get in the way. Some kids may choose the easier path and take their lives, but it is nobodies choice but theirs.

1 comment:

  1. Nice start to your summary. make sure to use a strong verb in your topic sentence. Condense down the pieces in your summary to make it more concise. Attribute all ideas back to author/director in your summary and avoid all opinion statements.

    Good response topic sentence. Make sure to set up and lead in to quotations to provide context. Make sure your explanation support your claim/counterclaim points. Do this for both claim and counterclaims. Where is your rebuttal progression as well as your concluding statement.

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